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Brilliant Anthony... This is so modern - yet so very strong ties to the classic kenning... you really nailed it...
damn...nice thump to this one....a cadence like a war-drum...like those hips...like those lips..insert rhachet of a shotgun...it was the wolfs joint line that jumped out at me...nice piece sir...cool kennings....
I agree with Bjorn 100% - perfectly modern and a fun read too. Cool attempt Anthony.
Oh, you did this so well, and it really added to the music of the poem. Nice!
Cool write, has real presence and strength.
dang - powerful images - that's all i have to say...smiles
I enjoyed the word pairings - very gritty and rolls off my tongue with a thud ~Grace
You have nailed the idea of kennings, Anthony! Breathtaking.
A cool write with raw hitting word craft direct in nature. Nicely Anthony!Hank
strong like the bite of moon-shine which we used to sample once upon a time. Nice
Very cool...yep you nailed it...strong and powerful word pairings...really enjoyed, Anthony.
Avidity is a powerful metaphor in taking life by the horns..and staying with it..in all it's spectrum of joy AND tarnish..of living IT to the fullest..and ya have certainly captured IT here..:)!
that sounds quite new with such new words...... well said
Wow..loved this and the repetition of the first stanza really adds to the rhythm...
It was dhum.. dum... dhum.. in my ears, like some tribal virtue being narrated around a fire.Good job with the kenning. Very well-penned.-HA
This one really reaches out and thumps the reader in the chest. I loved it.
Rolling sharply...kennings! ~ thanks for stopping by. :)
Oh, so primal, rhythmic and fast! Never heard those phrases before, I don't think I did at all.. smiles.. modern indeed.Lila
I need to catch my breath after reading your poem. Like some of the others have said, it is very powerful.
wow! really great powerful poem!
I have to admit the imagery in your poem makes me uneasy ... illegal liquor, shotguns, deer killing and cursing. But maybe you're describing a certain way of life and not glorifying it? Is this how avidity is seen in modern times? I hope you don't mind my honest comment. I had quite a visceral reaction to your poem, and maybe it was effective that way. :) Visiting from dVerse.
There's no "deer killing," Killdeer is a bird who fakes a broken wing to lure predators away from their young; hence, why the line is "Hunting killdeer-wing." It's okay that you feel uneasy - my poetry is meant to make you feel something... thanks.
Thanks for explaining about the killdeer--I misread that particular kenning. Still a haunting image. :) I do like levee-dancer--to me that conveys living on the edge, taking risks. I do understand that was the main message of your poem. I just don't do well with dark poetry--it stirs up painful memories. But maybe it's a good thing. Smiles.
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