when my crown fell into the
flames, I went down with it;
I put it back on and endured
the pain until the crown
became a part of me; thus,
my personal hell was now
my kingdom.
Posted for dversepoets;
originally from my Instagram.
35 comments:
i sometimes wonder why we do this when we could be so much more free without crown and honor....
What a terrible weight such a crown can have.. the transformation from honor to hell is so deep here.
But the advantage is that through plain, wisdom can be achieved, & empathy, sensitivity, existential cognizance, & as Monarch, you could change Hell into Fiji; just saying; loved yo9ur poetic though; another slightly different voice for you.
This is excellent poetry.
Typos are alway LOL; plain is, of course "pain". The piece has a real Brecht/Kafka feel to it, brother.
An interesting poem Anthony. Intriguing. >KB
In the greatest depths of misery.. sorrow..
emptiness.. piece of paper existence..
the seed of hull of hell is
is anti-matter to
create.. to grow
a
crown
of
Gold..:)
Whew. Gotta be careful where we choose to make our kingdom. And in being unwilling to lay down our crowns for something better.
This makes me think of Lucifer's fall and if this is how he felt the day after. Sometimes we all make those terrible mistakes that forever singe us and that we must live with. A very thoughtful and wise poem this is.
Woah I LIKED this! I caught your mood, too! Powerful, in many fields.
Spine tingling. Terrifying.
Wise words Anthony.
Sometimes our crown is who we are, all that we know. Rising from the depths returns us to where we were before the fall.
Anna :o]
I agree - my cross is also the source of my salvation.
Great poem, btw.
Some crowns are better tossed aside, if only we were able. Peace, Linda
The turn in the last part blew me away ~ When a crown becomes part of us, we can endure anything ~ Good one Anthony ~
"My crown fell into the[e]" says it all. This is a love/lust story gone wrong.
To me, this is a song to the human condition--something we all share. Perhaps the task of living is to shed that supposed crown/illusion.
Always find something unique and powerful when I read your poems. Thank you so much.
Wow! Very nice. Very powerful. Love how the last line really packs in all in. I love this!
Oh wow, this is startlingly good--well done, Anthony.
Sometimes that crown is heavy and the weight of it can be painful. I think it might be better to let it go. A lot said in this piece.
We generally do that and suffer eternal damnation...so very difficult to let go 'attachment'.. ...powerful lines emitting that aura of beauty...
This one burns an image on the mind...of heavy thoughts
Ambiguous, this one - asking more questions than it answers. Which is exactly what poetry is all about. I love how succinct it is, yet raises a lot of possibilities...
wise words here !
The swing from greatness into an abyss can be so quick. One gets overwhelmed without having the benefit of being forgiven even!
Hank
We want the crown so badly, that we're willing to endure the pain of hell to get it and keep it forever. Not worth it, I feel, but it's a matter of yearning I guess.
There are definitely reasons for not wanting a crown. Sometimes it is better to settle for life without one! This is really strong writing, Anthony. You are at your very best in this poem!
I agree with Mary, Anthony. At the risk of sounding teacher-like, I'd like to say that your poetry is getting better and better. You have kept the punch and retained the ambiguity but got rid of the obscureness. Your words made me wonder whether we'd choose those crowns again if they were handed over a second time. My guess is we would.
This is great, I love the paradox and the slight Volta with making the hell/pain your kingdom and lording over it as opposed to letting it lord over you. I quite enjoyed this.
Interesting perspective. The things we do to retain our glory. Nice piece!
This can be viewed in so many different perspectives ... loved it and the contrast it presents :-)
One word: Wonderful.
We all have a personal hell and at one point or another, we have to learn to rule over it.
-HA
Very concise and effective.
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