the fluidity of night
ran smooth like a train
on brand new tracks
I dream of riding
that train and one
of the cars being my home
complete with
a mail-order bride
a rare find like
a white boot with
no scuff marks
and the curves
on her body
matched the
dramatics of her
heavy german accent
heavy german accent
for dverse
19 comments:
I must say, I am a fan of german accents.
Ha, a mail order bride. That had to be some of the more interesting relationships, being dependent on the description. Some I am sure would be pleasant surprises, others -- well. I jumped a train once, it was cool. Scary. Would have been interesting to be a hobo. Maybe jump a train with Kerouac. That would have been cool. See the world out the open door.
This really elicits a romantic's response--the wonder of the unknown, complete with an-almost forbidden, dark liaison. Quite moody, really.
hahah...the dramatics of a heavy german accent cracks me up....cool work on the metaphorical side here anthony
You are leaning heavily into the untitled realm, these days, brother. Your railroad fantasy is fantastic; good luck keeping those white leather boots pristine; like a white carpet, it will gather dirt & scuffs pronto. LOVE COMES C.O.D. might be a title. Lovely & smooth piece though. TITS ON A TRAIN could work too.
You might have to wait a while for a mail-order bride with a German accent!!! ;-)
Some very interesting metaphors here, really pushing us beyond the usually coy and poetical.
This is AWESOME. I want to hear the whole story. Come on. Type it up. Please? :)
Super sexy ending:
"and the curves
on her body
matched the
dramatics of her
heavy german accent"
I do like the dreamy quality of this so much and the longing for something unknown, exotic, pure....we all have those dreams I think. Excellent work, this.
Such a dream like feel to this beautiful piece :D
Fluid and smooth to read Anthony ~ I fear for those mail order brides though smiles ~
Excellent poem my friend.
I'm such a fan of German Accents.
This poem soothes the soul of many.
Greatly & outstanding visual of words. :)
an angular poem - all sharp edges
I think that trains bring out the dreamer in many of us - especially those of us who don't ride them regularly. I think about those mail order brides, arriving in this country for the first time and finding their way.....must be hard.
You have such a gift for detailed description. Really stellar :-)
Trains.. symbols of anxiety killers..
so perfect aligned.. nothing
out of place.. the
Universe is
a Flower
and a Train
is a stick..
to escape
the train
is to become
Uni-verse of Life
in more than one
direction.. without
a stick in the other
direction up and
not down.. stuck..:)
that would be an adventurous and dramatic journey :)
nice work - those mail order brides may come with baggage :)
Nice, I like the romantic daydream in this. Hope you have many fluid nights, but find a real bride.
A chugging train creates that atmosphere of dreaminess with the faraway look and not talking to any one. Well penned Anthony!
Hank
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Intriguing ride. Today's poems are all adventures of different kinds.
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