The sweet nector of decadence pours into a jar of honey to set
I watched that jar of decadent honey turn to gold
The outcome was the most beautiful soul I've ever met
Amazing
The impossible existed
A unicorn with its wings lifted
The horned beauty turned, kneeled, & welcomed me
As I saddled on its back
My feet pulled off the ground
A slight struggle from the honey on the unicorn's hooves
Thoughts of melting the honey with fire
From a candle came across my mind
But my selfishness was in the wrong
Swiftly & slowly
The horned beauty trotted on adversity
And drilled the walls of hypocrisy
Leaving a sweet trail of honey with each step
We walked through blackouts, wars, & meltdowns
That misshaped the earth's mold
Little by little
And still
The unicorn couldn't fly
The decadent honey stayed on its hooves to keep
Us on the grounds of life
Force us to achieve
Even in strife
So pure, yet powerful
So strong, yet defenseless
The most beautiful soul I've ever met,
Was lifeless
© 2010 Anthony Desmond Scott. All Rights Reserved.
18 comments:
I love your poetry! It comes directly from your soul and that makes it outstanding.
:)
The first poem was well-written, the second was more gut-intense. Both worked.
I adore the use of metaphor here. Intense stuff.
Great work here. Imagery is so strong.
Riding the unicorn of legend through the myths of time. Well done Anthony. Thanks for this. Getting stronger all the time. Gay @beachanny
Wow to think that beauty and talent can be chained to the ground never to fly or live...
what great imagery my friend
A fantastic One shot
thanks for your kindness on my sight
Moon smiles
I liked it!
Sweet imagery likening honey to a flypaper trap. Great One Shot.
a beautiful spirit grounded. sounds like the whole human race.
love your poetry!
thank you
I love the slow halt it comes to - you almost whisper the last lines - The most beautiful soul I've ever met,
Was lifeless
The last two lines were a sting in the tail. A nice twist that adds gravity.
firstly....The most beautiful soul I've ever met,
Was lifeless...was a knockout ending
the whole poem though was a fluent, enjoyable read, i loved the interlinking of honey & unicorns...as monkey man said..a flypaper trap..cheers pete
Nothing more tragic than to watch something beautiful die.
I liked how your unicorn "drilled the walls of hypocrisy" - too often the unicorn's horn is portrayed as passive, which is counter-intuitive to the purpose of horns in the animal kingdom.
I also enjoy honey, so your incorporating it here really worked for me. Nice job, Anthony!
Force us to achieve
Even in strife.... strong words
great choice of characters in this piece.
This is beautiful Anthony....so many wonderful images...and an amazing metaphor. :-)
Amazing!One of the best ones I've read so far!
I'm partial to unicorns.Love them to bits!I love how you describe its strength and fragility!
Indeed,a beautiful one shot!
a dream-like flow in your poem and a wow! ending!!
well done anthony
hope you well..
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