Laid out like The Dalton Gang
Pale white like ostrich head
Arms crossed eyes shut for graves
Pyramids raided like weed heads
Rolled blunt fires scorching
Across ancient grounds
Tar on tip of cigarette light up
Blow like jokers bet
Sinking like hollow waters
Almost like the cement isn't set
Six shooters load & fire
Aim for higher like unsatisfied spirits
Exposed from bullet holes
Like flaming exhibitionists
Bill Powers like Grant Dalton
Full brim hat
Neatly trimmed mustache
Archived like revolver blueprints
© Anthony Desmond Scott. All Rights Reserved.
22 comments:
I guess any scenario would be the same - a waste!
nice one Anthony some history et al
Appreciate the One Shot
I had to google the history, I'm funny like that! Loved the story in here, you're wise for a young 'un! I like that. Great poem Anthony
Never read a poem about The Dalton Gang, let alone an extremely creative one with a great deal said between the lines. Powerful way to end too.
All the stuff of American folklore. I grew up in Texas (not far OK border) hearing these tales. Lord they glorified the outlaws through the Great Depression! You did a bang up job here, Anthony! Thanks, Gay
whew...blow like jokers...some nice simile play in this one...gritty i like it...and the new header...
A gripping write that leads to the reader wanting to know more of the story. The image grabs the attention, and the words pull you right through to the close. A well delivered piece that's a Oneshot winner.
powerful blow.
Thanks for sharing it with Jingle Poetry.
Cheers.
A++
keep rocking.
I love the old world feel of it. The last line really, really stayed with me. "Archived like revolver blueprints"
Love the way you write about history and bring the past to life....nice piece on the Dalton Gang...bkm
woah! this is nice! here's my potluck~ http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/03/12/broken-home/
That's powerful and edgy. Excellently done.
Nice one for the bandelero -- high caliber and explosive-tipped. - Brendan
What a great feel! Lots to like here.
(And lots of the word "like" too! LOL!)
A very nice piece, Anthony! Different for you.
Very raw and powerful!
so interesting! i loved this, it was so well depicted and written. great poem.
here's some of me really old pieces (to fit the theme, but please also bare in mind that some of these i wrote years ago:
http://belladonna23.wordpress.com/2010/08/05/the-rain-comes-but-the-river-runs-dry/
http://belladonna23.wordpress.com/2010/07/30/the-question/
http://belladonna23.wordpress.com/2010/07/11/the-burning-eternal/
Suprised not to see the face in the header. The Dalton gang...sureal.
powerful stuff..
ransom
Wow, very good, very creative.
Ohh... I like the intensity in here..
And "archived like revolver blueprints"... that was a very well used metaphor...
A gripping One Shot, Anthony!! Whheeww
Superb story telling, versifying.
yes - archived like revolver blueprints - is also the line that sticks with me - powerful write anthony
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