they survived
The slaves the prisoners the raves
they celebrated
The eagle the night the sky
they danced
The hero the villain the victim
they merged
The dumb ass the teacher the stubborn
they learned
The genius the ignorant the minion
they taught
The artist the tree hugger the archaeologist
they created
The leader the wall the guards
they fell
The peeping tom the girl the onlooker
they understood
The killer the boy the saviour
they changed
The man the woman the child
they loved
The predators the angels the demons
they walked
© 2010 Anthony Desmond Scott. All Rights Reserved.
14 comments:
Oh Nice Anthony, I love contrast and you melded many so nicely here in various aspects of our humanity...one is nothing without the other - how can we separate even angels from demons if one or other did not know existence - the merging of villan and victim..that is my favorite line and a powerful image.......bkm
Thank you very much bkm!
love the structure of this poem - great rhythm and looks like a skeleton - great idea anthony
Great work, Anthony
Love the nouns now and again into one action, direction,... that of life- as long as they live... even the dead survive. Yes
Very, very nice. Full bodied poem....with a haunting quality.
Lady Nyo
Thanks Claudia & Dulce! :)
thanks Asobime!
Very original thinking here Anthony loved the lines
The killer the boy the saviour
they changed
The man the woman the child
they loved
and the fact that it looks like a ribcage
Really like the internal rhyme in the first strophe. You should play with that and see if you could carry it throughout
tight anthony, you picked some intriguing pairings along the way..and i too like the way you structured this one...
intriguing piece...
...rob kistner
Image & Verse
What a great form! Looks fittingly skeltal!
Great One Shot, Anthony!
Wow! This is a remarkable piece. I love everything about it: structure, statements, poignancy... somehow you have summed up the human race.
Hi Anthony...
They walked the earth.. a very nice rhythm to it all you created and ending was perfect so I could not help saying it....
they walked the earth...
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