Serenade me with
a biblical verse
in a whisper
so pure it only
so pure it only
deserves to be
heard by a man
laid in a hearse
follow me like
a brick tied to
foot thrown in
a river though
the suicide note
was illegible not
because of the ink
running miles behind
me my childish ways
were beside me as betrayal stemming from the devil's
emancipation I hid like a bride's apathy in a veil laced
with compensation the lord of darkness was Jesus to me
a hermaphrodite
was given to thee
a steady final plea
risen from the sea
as Aphrodite
©2011 Anthony Desmond Scott. All Rights Reserved.
hid like a brides apathy...the concrete upside down cross too says much...well constructed anthony...superb delivery as i have grown to expect...much respect man
ReplyDeleteand i dont understand hate & discrim myself though grew up around it every where and know it still exists...
Wow, I like the way you use the upside down cross bust still build rhythm and rhymes into your poetry. Shape poems sometimes feel forced, but this does not.
ReplyDeleteAs an aside, I love the top image on your blog.
"emancipation I hid like a bride's apathy in a veil laced with compensation the lord of darkness was Jesus to me" the driving refutation expressed in the lines and the visual presentation... damn artful and bold.
ReplyDeleteThe architecture is an immediate compelling aspect to this piece. A feeling of at odds pulled the energy forward as I read. A very capturing write! ~ Rose
ReplyDeleteThanks everyone... much appreciated.
ReplyDeletethe bride's apathy and the veil laced with compensation is a strong image anthony..tight write
ReplyDeleteThis is excellent in so many ways... I just love what is written in the shadow of the cross
ReplyDeleteyour look at death, betrayal and the cross each a volume for each - yet you pull them together in a whisper, a plea, in apathy
ReplyDeletewell done Anthony
:) Moonie and thanks for everything
This is excellent and well done :)
ReplyDeleteI honestly am tongue tied.
ReplyDeleteThere are so many vivid images in this. You've used the shape, almost like a negative image of the cross above, so well. It reinforced your words perfectly.
ReplyDeleteAnd once again, I'm struck by the picture at the top. You always give us such wonderful images.
The imagery and diction evoke a series of emotions, all raw. Nice write.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful imagery and flow.. thought provoking, and the verse shaped like a cross was well done!
ReplyDeleteMy One Shot Poem
So awesome! Stop in & read Breaking Away
ReplyDeleteyour words are always expressed powerfully and passionately. thankful you are free from constraint in your expressions.
ReplyDeleteI can't thank any of you enough... the things all of you wonderful poets say about my work still just wows me... it really means so much! I appreciate all the support
ReplyDeleteThe upside down cross, great shape, great meaningful poem expressed articulately and intelligently. Way to go hun!
ReplyDeleteHey, very nice indeed.
ReplyDeleteThe visual impact of your post, adds a wow factor to the finished product but should not detract from the power of the words themselves. I like reading pieces which come from completely new angles - they make me sit up and take note.
ReplyDeleteThe visual impact you have created with the image and upside down cross shaped words.. it has only added to the intensity of the theme!
ReplyDeletevery well written..
Hugs xox
Anthony, the visual is fantastic with this piece...your writing is coming to find its real voice I believe after reading the past couple of One Shots...the brides apathy veiled...and more..the emotion is felt full and not hidden which makes it a great write...nice work..bkm
ReplyDeleteNot just a clever arrangement, but a strong message as well. It would work either way.
ReplyDeletepowerful imagery... I liked especially the part about the brick tied to the foot of the suicide... Strong write.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful...I think these are my favorite lines because of the image that came to mind.
ReplyDeletethe suicide note
was illegible not
because of the ink
running miles behind
me my childish ways
I'm just blown away. Poignantly worded and perfectly arranged, your words grip both spiritually and physically. Bravo!
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ReplyDeleteimpressive - your poems are uninhibited, which is a unique style I have come to expect and enjoy from you, Anthony.
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