Hair: like bondage
it
wraps wraps
and and
wraps
and and
wraps wraps
and and
wraps
and and
wraps wraps
around the arms and
not only stops movement
but it slows down time
Bound by the hair on God's knuckles, it forces
them to reflect on every memory they
wish they could forget; thus, the
enjoyment in pulling out
your hair is found.
I know it hurts but
continue sipping love nectar
until you're
unrecognizable
be my bitch be what I'm looking for
and water me
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Anthony Desmond Scott. All Rights Reserved.
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25 comments:
First of all, I like the intriguing shape of this poem....and I can just picture that long hair wrapping & slowing down time; and next time I see God I will be checking his knuckles. Smiles.
Wow! Fabulous! Both in content and form, originality and creativity. Excellent composition.
The pulling of hair and wrapping and God, make me think of flagelants - the pain we sense when pulling the hair makes us feel.
really cool structure anthony...wicked cool closure on this....its got edge but also a tenderness...it was the boiund by the hair on gods knuckles stanza that really stood out to me...as i processed that mentally...and the symbolism of that...
I love the format though like the hair wrapping around and around ~ Hair like a bondage, and that ending line, water me, really struck me ~
A very challenging & unique challenge Anthony thanks ~
whew man - what a tight write - love the hair on god's knuckles.... awesome
I like the layout of your poem, Anthony, and how you end up with a kind of love plea.
streetwise, yet tender under the scruff; like others the hair of God's knuckles knocked my ass out; & it is good to see the shape, the form of the lines emancipated, free as fruit flies fluttering through rips in the screen door. Got appointment today so will catch up on the trail later; terrific prompt, brother.
Interesting layout here - and I can only imagine that the web image does not quite correspond with the vision you had in your mind! (I read an interesting preface to May Sarton's poetry about the challenges of poem layouts in ebooks).
Beautiful poem.
Love the style and the layout. Perfect piece my friend. :)
I love the texture that hair ads to art/ and poetry.Your format is almost like a mask one of the masks above.
Very cool!
cool shaping of the poetry...gives a visual to what you are saying.
That was an innovative way to present your poem and your words are always crisp with a snap here and there..Thanks for hosting tonight.
So much to like about this, Anthony. The weaving of words like a braid, almost. "Bound by the hair on God's knuckles..." the god we made like us. And as someone said, above, the texture of this. Great! Fun prompt.
A very creative way of presenting your poem. It reminds me of the braiding motion as you have beautifully shown in your words.
Excellent prompt tonight!
God, time, love, lost love, growth… all woven together … "braided" into one. At least that's what I got out of it.
I felt the pain...the redemption (reminds me of The Mission), the being bound by God...great images, Anthony! And thanks for the cool prompt.
Yes.. there's no escape from the hair of bondage.. to find the roots of hair that is ..is hair not lost.. in life as is..:)
A nice blend of story and scheme.
I love that phrase "Bound by the hair on God's knuckles". What an image! You always deliver the unique words, and I am delighted by them :-)
I agree with what many others have said regarding the imagery you present...the bondage, hair on God's knuckles, water, etc. Excellent concrete/visual piece.
Strong - you should submit this - could be award winning
The aesthetics of this poem is truly captivating... definitely imitates the natural flow of hair... You've really created some amazing visuals in this powerful piece of poetry <3 I especially like the phrase "Bound by the hair on God's knuckles"... I think most of us do... smiles
I am quite in awe of this, the structure especially. This is a poem that I will be thinking about for awhile.
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