Sunday, March 20, 2011

Creation of Skeleton

The dead the alive the diamonds
they survived
The slaves the prisoners the raves
they celebrated
The eagle the night the sky
they danced
The hero the villain the victim
they merged
The dumb ass the teacher the stubborn
they learned
The genius the ignorant the minion 
they taught
The artist the tree hugger the archaeologist
they created
The leader the wall the guards
they fell
The peeping tom the girl the onlooker 
they understood
The killer the boy the saviour 
they changed 
The man the woman the child 
they loved

The predators the angels the demons 
they walked



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14 comments:

signed...bkm said...

Oh Nice Anthony, I love contrast and you melded many so nicely here in various aspects of our humanity...one is nothing without the other - how can we separate even angels from demons if one or other did not know existence - the merging of villan and victim..that is my favorite line and a powerful image.......bkm

Anthony Desmond said...

Thank you very much bkm!

Claudia said...

love the structure of this poem - great rhythm and looks like a skeleton - great idea anthony

Dulce said...

Great work, Anthony
Love the nouns now and again into one action, direction,... that of life- as long as they live... even the dead survive. Yes

Asobime said...

Very, very nice. Full bodied poem....with a haunting quality.

Lady Nyo

Anthony Desmond said...

Thanks Claudia & Dulce! :)

Anthony Desmond said...

thanks Asobime!

repressedsoul said...

Very original thinking here Anthony loved the lines

The killer the boy the saviour
they changed
The man the woman the child
they loved

and the fact that it looks like a ribcage

Steven Marty Grant said...

Really like the internal rhyme in the first strophe. You should play with that and see if you could carry it throughout

Brian Miller said...

tight anthony, you picked some intriguing pairings along the way..and i too like the way you structured this one...

robkistner said...

intriguing piece...

...rob kistner
Image & Verse

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

What a great form! Looks fittingly skeltal!

Great One Shot, Anthony!

Kerry O'Connor said...

Wow! This is a remarkable piece. I love everything about it: structure, statements, poignancy... somehow you have summed up the human race.

Shashi said...

Hi Anthony...

They walked the earth.. a very nice rhythm to it all you created and ending was perfect so I could not help saying it....
they walked the earth...

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